https://legit-writing-tips.tumblr.com/ · May 25, 2020

I have an 11-year-old who was the only person in the position to have learned some information, so he’s the one doing the exposition. I was criticized for making him sound too mature (“professorial” was the word that was used), but I don’t know how to fix it. I don’t think he uses any individual words an 11-year-old wouldn’t, so I guess he’s too organized in how he presents info? But how do you make a character less organized in presenting their thoughts without making them more confusing?